pause aching confusion disappointment her thoughts are sowing her mind's a grassy field in the middle of the night no room for flowers or beauty the darkness is exploding inwards the distress crawling its way on her limbs the silence is speaking loud, suffocating in the ecstasy of despair, overwhelming an aching intuition exalting to be heard floating near spikes terms of bondage sound of guilty anxiety exploring mess wisdom is lost
Tanka Tuesday this week is synonyms only and the words are Green and Morass, I’ve chosen grassy and confusion as the synonyms words.
WQWWC theme is Exploration – There are so many stuff to be explored around us, but I decided to go inwards, the exploration of feelings, the mind and body getting together in an explosion of uncertainties in the middle of the night.
This poetry form is a new form to me, again exploration shows off here, it’s called Tree of life, a syllabic form containing 19 lines, unrhymed, following the syllabic order: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4.
I haven’t added any image to this poem. I wish for the reader to feel the emotion of this poem without any distraction from an image. And the poem has the shape of a tree, so it’s an image by itself.
WE SHALL NOT CEASE FROM EXPLORATION, AND THE END OF ALL OUR EXPLORING WILL BE TO ARRIVE WHERE WE STARTED AND KNOW THE PLACE FOR THE FIRST TIME.
T. S. ELIOT
Hope you enjoyed it! I have written another Tree of life poem here, this time about a willow tree, I’m really enjoying this syllabic form.
Your poem is amazing, Elizabeth! I know what that feels like. Great interpretation! I love this poetry style. โค
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Thanks so much, Vashti! I think this style will be my favourite from now on! ๐
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I know of several people who have memory loss issues and I think your piece describes how they must feel.
Thanks for the new form. ๐
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Oh, yes! Welcome! ๐
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Your Tree of Life poem is powerful, Elizabeth! I like this poem without images. So many times we rely on the photo to get our point across. Your words are everything we need to feel right along with you. Bravo! โค
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Thanks so much, Colleen! I was looking for a photo to go with it, but I thought the poem was saying everything, no need for photo. Glad you agree with me!
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Yes! Our words should carry the meaning. You did fabulous! โค๏ธ
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That’s a good evocation of anxiety–it pushes everything else away. And an interesting form. (K)
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Anxiety can make us to see only darkness. It doesn’t let the light come in. Thanks!
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Powerful writing, Elizabeth. I felt the emotions and journeyed with you. ๐
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Thanks so much, Gwen! Glad you did! ๐
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I like this format and that you allowed the images and feelings to speak for themselves ๐
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Thanks! It’s a pretty format indeed, I could have been more cheerful, but I think it turned out ok.
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I love this form. It’s a beautiful emotive post, though sad. Thanks for sharing! ๐
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The form is beautiful, I thought to be more cheerful, but it was difficult at that moment, for sure I’ll use this form with happier mood.
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No worries, Liz. I only write poetry when I’m doing so for a challenge or I am in such a sad mood I have to do something. I’m not very sad right now, so I’m not writing much poetry. LOL
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I think it’s good then, no poetry time! ๐
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LOL. I would love to write happy poetry, but I’m busy writing other things then. Tanka Tuesday helps me write poetry for reasons other than venting.
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