The Circle of Life
In the morning she opens the window
The mountain greats her: Good morning my darling!
At midday, the mountain says: How are you my darling?
In the evening the mountain whispers to her:
Come to me my darling, I’m waiting for you
Trying a new form of poetry for Colleen’s Tanka Tuesday poetry challenge. The form is Gogyoka, below is Colleen’s description for it. Hope I’ve gotten it right!
The Gogyoka in English syllabic poetry form is the only form that does not require a syllable count per the five lines. Please be mindful that each line should be the duration of a single breath or a phrase. Choose your words carefully…
Tea & Paper 
This is so beautiful! You are very talented! I see this in my mind superimposed over a beautiful photo! Lovely!
Peace,
Tamara
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Thanks so much, Tamara. Peace to you too!
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Beautifully written. Poems are so wonderful to read.
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They are words with feelings!
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Simply marvelous writing, Elizabeth and so interesting too. Lovely.
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Thanks so much!
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Welcome 😊😊😊😊
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very interesting and intriguing form. i loved your poem.
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Thanks so much!
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My pleasure
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Reblogged this on Where Genres Collide Traci Kenworth YA Author & Book Blogger and commented:
Like this!
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Thanks so much!
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Beautiful response.
Elizabeth, I am holding a blogging party this weekend and it would be lovely to have you there and for you to share your wonderful blog there.
even if you visit for a few minutes.
would love you to be there.
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Wow! Yes, I’ll be there! Thanks so much!
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Great 🤗
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Excellent, Elizabeth. Also, don’t you think this particular form would “sound” amazing too? It’s those breaths that make all the difference. ❤
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Thanks Colleen, I completely agree, the sound and the pauses really make a difference!
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This has such a Native Peoples quality – at least to me.
I like the sensitivity of both ‘she’ and ‘the mountain’
I also like the form – though I do not recall ever writing in it myself.
I’ve heard of it – thanks for the reintroduction and the explanation.
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Hi Jules, thank you for visiting! First time I see this poetry form as well, and I like it! I’m in Canada and we have lots of mountains and Natives too, the contact with nature is very important. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Very well done 💜
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Thanks!
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💜💜💜
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I love the idea of the mountain speaking though out the day.
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I liked saying each line with a single breath. This is beautiful, Elizabeth. And relaxing to read, too.
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I’m so happy you like it, I was so insecure to give a try to poetry again after a long break.
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this is a wonderful form – i stumbled across it 2 years ago and find it is a good way to start a daily musings or journal writing – your poem is beautifully crafted Elizabeth. the mountains echo such calming verses to your soul
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First time I heard about this form, I like it, it’s freeing. I’m so happy you like my poem, I haven’t written a poem for so long. Hugs to you!
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it was a most beautiful one, full of your gentleness and strength Elizabeth – all that I admire about you
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Thanks for lovely words 🙂
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